Thursday, March 5, 2009

Xavier Neal
ENG 111-53
1/20/09
Diagnostic Rough Draft Essay 1
There are two very power attributes an individual can possess in this world; the ability to give to another and help another from a pure heart. I believe that every person has a purpose on this world, mine is to help people. When I was seventeen I was hired at this leadership camp for under privileged kids. Here I was given the opportunity to teach children ages eight to sixteen, different leadership traits that would be very beneficial in their lives. Although I only worked here two months, I absolutely loved it, it was the best job I’ve ever had. I take pleasure in empowering individuals with thoughts to better oneself and one’s environments and I believe this is my way of helping.
I wasn’t the best child growing up, as a matter of fact I consider myself one of the worst. I experience with drugs, skip schools, and participated in a lot of activities I shouldn’t have. I had a sudden change of heart because of a serious incident that I encountered at the age of sixteen. Following the incident I gave up all my treacherous ways and longed for success. My pastor was a great remodel at this time in my life; one of the best things he did was lead me to the subject of positive thinking. Positive thinking helped changed my life completely!! I truly believe the best way to help someone is to teach them to think positive.
While working at the leadership camp I expressed the manifold blessings of positive thinking and the children were greatly affected. At the end of the camp the parents of the children revealed their gratefulness toward the teacher who taught them positive things, because they saw instant changes. A lot of the kids lived in belittling environment and it had a direct pessimistic affect on their minds. Teaching them positive thinking excited hope in them and a drive was born to excel and not just live. Purpose fulfillment danced in my bones, I felt so happy and complete all because I helped another.
My mind is to be a great help to people, especially adolescents, this is why working at the leadership camp has been the best job I’ve ever had. If everyone knew how to think positive failure would deplete and the world would be a better place each and every day.

Xavier Neal
ENG 111-53
1/20/09
Diagnostic Final Draft 1
If I were a Superhero
In this world there are two powerful attributes one can possess; one, the ability to give to another and two, the ability to help others. Personally, I believe everyone has a purpose on this planet; some are built to teach, some are ordained to build while another to tear down. My divine purpose is to help people, especially in the mental department. I remember when I was seventeen; I was hired at this leadership camp for under privileged kids. Here I was awarded the opportunity to instruct children ages eight to sixteen. I taught them different leadership traits that would prove beneficial in their individual lives. Although I only worked at this camp for two months, I absolutely loved it, it was the best job I’ve ever had. I take pleasure in empowering individuals with thoughts aimed at bettering oneself and one’s environment and I truly believe this is my way of helping.
I wasn’t a “golden child” growing up, as a matter of fact I considered myself to be one of the worst. I tampered with drugs, skipped school, and participated in many activities that I shouldn’t have. One day, I had a sudden change of heart; I suffered this incident at the age of sixteen that changed my life. Following the incident I gave up all my treacherous ways and longed for success. My pastor was a great role model in my life at this time; one of the best things he’s ever done was lead me to the subject of positive thinking. Positive thinking helped changed my life completely! I deem this statement factual: The best way to help someone mentally is to teach them to think positive. Gandhi stresses positive thinking as well, he quotes, “A man is a product of his thoughts, what he thinks he becomes!”
While working at the leadership camp I expressed the manifold blessings of positive thinking and the children were greatly affected. At the end of the camp the parents of the children were extremely grateful toward the teacher who taught their children positive things The parents proclaimed that they saw instant changes in their kids words and actions alike. These children lived in belittling environment that had a direct pessimistic affect on their minds. Teaching them positive thinking excited hope in their little souls and a drive was born to excel and not just live. Purpose fulfillment danced in my bones, I felt so happy and complete all because I helped another.
My dream is to be a great help to people, especially adolescents, this is why the leadership camp is the best job I’ve ever had. If everyone knew how to think positive failure would deplete and the world would be a better place each and every day. As Ralph Waldo Emerson would put it, “Thoughts Rule the World!”

Wednesday, March 4, 2009

My time in Eng 111



Greetings,

The experience I had in English 111 with Mr. Paul Gasparo was a rewarding one. I've taken Eng 111 before at another school but my credits didn't transfer over, for some reason this class was actually much harder then the other. It was much harder but I also learned more that I can take with me into future classes. I learned alot in the class ranging from filling my decided writing with juicy descriptions to correctly formatting work cited references at the end of a paper. We watched a couple of videos which was very beneficial as well. The biggest area of improvement for me is the area of Rhetorical analysis', here we studyied three different areas pertaining to writing. In the study of these areas we learned how to better appeal to the senses of the intended audience of the article being read. First we studied, Ethos, which means credibility. Whatever the subject written about, throughout the paper there should be words and phrases refering to sources that makes the article or paper (whatever it might be) a credible one. For instance, if I'm writing about basketball, it would be a wise choice to reference a saying from Michael Jordan to make my paper more credible. Second, we visited pathos, which means emotions. Emotions are the voice of a paper, our aim here is to give explanation that cater to the emotions of the reader. Also we attempted to explain in detail how whatever we were writing about has affected us emotionally. This causes the paper to be filled with detail and flow that captures the audience making the peice entertaining. For example, if I wrote a paper about a time where I was sentenced to prison. In the paper I give great details on the way I was feling when I first got arrested. I was sad and overwhelmed, nervous and impatient my heart beat was seen through my shirt... That was just a taste lol! Lastly we focused on Logos, which is the logic of the writing. We must ensure that the writing is logical and not some nonsensical expression causing us to look foolishly and thusfar loosing our audience. Amongst learning this, I also learned how to carefully and vividly explore my writing and make revisions. Because of this, in the future, me being an English Major, will now be well off and able to teach others. The class participated in debates and intellectual discussions where I received a wealth of knowledge as well. This pretty much sums up my experience in this class, one I'm glad I had!!! :)


Wednesday, February 4, 2009

Hi everyone

Just saying hi, I have to create this for class now if you can blog to this you're good!!